Logline Blogfest: Sex, Drugs, and Steamwork

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Since Sex, Drugs, and Steamwork isn't finished, I couldn't enter the logline contests, however Steena Holmes is holding a logline blogfest and I squeaked by just in the nick of time. Having this logline helps me find the focus of the story (since it doesn't have one really and/or is incredibly convoluted.)

"When steamwork mechanic, Alessandra Mijares, unwittingly becomes a criminal for saving a fugitive magician, she seeks refuge in Underground with the magical creatures. Her fate rests in an eccentric mage or a skirt-chasing prince, both eager to use her for their own interests."

 I hope this piques your interests. I'm curious to know what your thoughts are. Now off to the next blog.

EDIT: Thanks for all the feedback. Here's the edit:

"When steamwork mechanic Alessandra unwittingly becomes a criminal for saving a  fugitive magician, she seeks refuge in Underground with the magical creatures. To get to safety, she must rely on herself, but an eccentric mage and a skirt-chasing prince are both eager to use her for their own interests."

EDIT 2: Another edit. I need more action in the second sentence. I hope this clears things up (most likely not, but it doesn't hurt to get feedback). I'm wondering if giving the names of the mage/magician and the Prince would make things clearer.

"When steamwork mechanic Alessandra unwittingly becomes a criminal for saving a fugitive magician, she finds herself stranded in Underground with dangerous magical creatures. The eccentric mage blackmails her into deactivating his war machines while she catches the eye of the spoiled skirt-chasing prince who's family wants her in jail."